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PostSubject: Catastrophic Conclusion   Catastrophic Conclusion I_icon_minitimeFri Jul 17, 2009 11:54 pm

This was my first set of lyrics, actually. Back when all I listened to was Sepultura about a year ago.

Guns-a-blazing, Tanks-a-rolling
Buildings up in Smoke.

Toxic gas begins to fill the air
The people begin to choke.

Civil uprising, it's not surprising
The Government has no Control

Civilians are dying, no point in trying
Humanity takes a toll.

Children with guns, Parent-less sons,
Neighborhoods at War.

The innocent strangled, maimed and tangled,
Bodies litter the floor.

Millions suffer, survival is tougher,
Civilized no more.


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PostSubject: Re: Catastrophic Conclusion   Catastrophic Conclusion I_icon_minitimeSat Jul 18, 2009 8:21 pm

Without reading the first sentence you used to preface it... I thought Slayer. Definitely room for improvement but I suppose not too bad for a first attempt.
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PostSubject: Re: Catastrophic Conclusion   Catastrophic Conclusion I_icon_minitimeTue Aug 11, 2009 12:03 am

Slayer? Hmm... I don't see a resemblance, but ok.
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